On Thursday morning me, Dad and my cousin Reid got up to go pig hunting in the Queen Charlotte Sounds. First we collared the best dogs up.Then we headed off. The day started of really bad. The dogs didn't get on to anything.
As the day went on it got better. The dogs chased a big deer. Later on we heard the dogs start yakking in the gully and Dad said,"Is that our dogs yakking in the gully?" And I said," Yes". Then the dogs started baling in a side gut. Me and Dad drove to a floating jetty. Dad said,"They have sunk him now." We got about 80 or 90 meters and it went quiet. Dad said "That has never happened." Then they had it again. The thing was that Reid broke the bail and the pig had charged Reid, and he climbed up a tree and was freaking out! By the time we got there the dogs and the pig came speeding past us. I was skidding down the hill and I went under the pig and it showed its shiny sharp tusk at me. My dad stuck it with a sharp knife. It was 115lb.We were excitied and happy. By Johny.
5 comments:
Helena liked the describing words- bright shiny tusks.
You have used lots of different sentence starters- Hamish.
You have added more detail- where, who, what, how, -Josh B
You can picture this in your mind.- Josh R
Great use of speech marks-Sam
The title makes the story sound really good.-Jack
Great use of commas and exclamation marks.- Hamish
You are beginning to use paragraphs.- Mrs D
you could tell how big the boar was-josh R.
BOYD liked all the good sentence starters that you uesed and Torin said you could really picture it in your mind!
I had heaps of fun with my cousin and dad. I think I could have added more detail so people could picture it in their mind.
Johny
I loved when you told us lots of detail about who you went with and what sort of day it was.
Josh
Hi Johny-I like the title where you put Westys because no one else would put that as there title.You also put lots of adjectives in your amazing story.My favorite adjective was the shiny sharp tusk.It was also very intresting and when I read it I picked up lots of it.Ameera
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